The click of the lock sounds as the key is turned in the door.
I hear the familiar creak as the door swings open,
And my footsteps pound against the hardwood floor.
The thick air wraps around me like a warm, cozy hug,
And as I inhale, the scent of freshly baked chocolate chip cookies invades my nose.
The sound of laughter and people having a good time fills my ears.
My family sends me warm, friendly smiles
As they rush to greet me.
I am filled with an overwhelming sense of happiness.
And I know,
I’m home.
Sydney Rubin
“I love the imagery you used. Just from the words, “I’m Home”, I can already feel the warmth and the happiness radiating from this post. The part about the sound of laughter filling the ears especially speaks to me. One of my most favorite things about family get-togethers are the never ending bouts of laughter and the flashbacks to all the embarrassing moments from childhood. 🙂 ” -Ciana Gadut
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The imagery you used in your poem is really impressive! Throughout reading, I felt like I was with you experiencing everything alongside you. I love how you didn’t just describe being home by talking about seeing your family and having conversations with them, but you used more interesting ways of expressing this feeling such as saying “I hear the familiar creak as the door swings open” and “The thick air wraps around me like a warm, cozy hug.” I think this is a really unique approach and it definitely conveys your message well!
– Selma Cemerlic
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I felt like I could see in my mind exactly what was happening and I was able to picture myself in the poem. That takes very well written imagery and descriptive language. The sounds you used throughout the poem like: “click of the lock”, “familiar creak”, “footsteps pound”, and “laughter”, make this poem feel so real. It was awesome to read this poem because on the outside it is a simple topic yet after you read it you realize how powerful it is. By the end, the reader can see how happy and comfortable home is for you and how much your family enjoys you coming home. Great writing and imagery!
-Kyle Regan
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I loved how expressive you were with your words in this poem! The imagery you used was so descriptive and you made this whole scene feel so familiar. I really liked how while I was reading this, I truly felt like I was there with you. The sensory image was so so good and while reading this, I feel like all my different senses were being utilized. I particularly liked the quote “the thick air wraps around me like a warm, cozy huge” It just felt so homey and your poem had such a nice overall relaxing and positive tone!
-Joanna
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