Sarina Simpson
When a dark blue blanket falls over the sky
And the stars shine like a flame amongst the shadows, so high
Every noise
Melts into the void
And silence descends upon all that’s nearby
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There is no other time in which comfort is so close
And to fear the darkness is to oppose
A feeling of peace
In which you can release
What makes you hurt the most
~
You will not hear anyone drone, and moan, and groan
About anything because you’re all alone
Nothing to be heard
Means your worries will be deferred
Thinking and feeling you can postpone
~
Cherish that blanket, the day’s counterpart
And bury your conscience in the dark
For when light creeps in
And they wake again
Serenity falls apart
English 110 Honors Spring 2020 
Both the content and composition of your poem are beautifully thought out. One of my struggles with poetry and something I admire is the ability to create a seamless flow between lines, which you accomplish perfectly. Reading your stanzas felt so smooth despite the variation in your line length and structure. I especially like these lines in stanza two, “And to fear the darkness is to oppose/ A feeling of peace/ In which you can release/ What makes you hurt the most.” You are able to convey a very strong message with a small amount of powerful words. I can also relate to the sense of peace you convey feeling at night. I like how you address how people shouldn’t be afraid of the dark because it is the only time we can truly relish in the feeling of stillness and calm. Much like your metaphor of a “blue blanket [falling] over the sky,” my worries of the day are cloaked by the night and I can just simply rest when night falls. Great job and thank you for sharing your talent!
-Cally Carmello
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Deep description and vivid imagery. Great job! I feel the sense of peace and calmness that you feel at night. I love the use of words such as “melts”, “cloaked”, and “creeps”. Those types of words help to build the peaceful mood you aim to achieve. Also, I love how you compare peace from night time to the hectic and busy day time. Very well done!
-Austin Grimm
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This poem seems to be carefully and perfectly put together, not simply something for an English assignment. I have always struggled with poetry, and this shows that you clearly do not. The words flow so well and gave me a sense of calmness, yet also slightly eerie. I really liked the second stanza, it stuck out to me, and I found myself rereading it multiple times. You portray such a powerful statement with so little words, and I find that interesting. You are able to show your own meaning/intent, while also allowing the readers to interpret it on their own. Thank you for such a meaningful piece!
-Bray Fedele
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